Bill the English Teacher

Expector Smith April 19, 2009 15:00

Hi Bill,
Thanks for your notice. We'll miss you and wish you a very good summer vacation! You really is an admirable teacher and we'll be here waiting for you!!!
Nadiyah April 19, 2009 9:04

Hi Bill,
Thanks very much, I hope you are very well.

I am very happy your answer and respect to my first poem translate in English and understand it.

Really I am confuse into choose right word to mypoem, and don’t know what must I doing it. I told for you that mypoem is first translate in English.Why I want doing it? Because its first I send to myfriend, someone from Algeria, and it is touch his heart. And its meaningfully for me.

Do you know Mr.Bill,someone from Algeria had send me his poems, and its made me happy. He so respect and told me about his heart, I felt his broken heart and hope I can help him.

In my quotation "we are god's the poems", means my God so like a beautifully, a poem is thing beautiful. Do you know … with the poem I wish gonna to the world …

Okay Mr.Bill, below there are many ask for you :

1.That man, almost dead to me. Can I don’t use words 'to me'? also in … to reveal 'himself' and … to release 'himself' What is it can meaning influent ?
2.In held in tightness but longing to reveal himself. Why there is word 'but' between tightness …. Longing? I want say that words tightness longing are integral part. My mean there is no certainty, still hang.
3.In As my longing fades. Can I use mylonging drops, its means that only He need, hope and wishes me not other.word 'drops' is symbolism.

Thanks Mr.Bill, I know myenglish not well but I thank to the god I have friend like you that understand what I want to say. I hope you can help and explain it.

Local language (Indonesia)

Lelaki itu … (3)
Lelaki itu hampir mati
Dalam kesesakan kerinduan yang masih menggantung
Mencoba lepas
Dan berlari pada rimbunan pohon kamboja tak bersemi
Sia-sia …
Hanya ada satu jalan
Tetesan kerinduanku …

Mytranslation

That man ... (3)
That man almost death
in tightness missing (longing)still hanging out
trying to release
and running in the bunch of cambodia that not spring
useless ...
there's only one way
my missing (longing) drops ...

Yourinterpretation

That man ... (3)
That man, almost dead to me,
held in tightness but longing to reveal himself,
trying to release himself,
runs helplessly through a grove of dormant Cambodia trees
uselessly ...
there's only one true way
as my longing fades

Nice day,
Success for you,

-Nadiyah-
Lynne April 18, 2009 13:57

You're a kind teacher, Bill.
I will always be a good student and friend to you.
-lynne-
Lynne April 18, 2009 6:32

-lynne-
yunita lestari April 18, 2009 6:04

Hi, Bill. Thanks for replying my comment on your blog. I've been waiting for it. I thought the next comment is for me but it's not. Can't wait your next challenge on your blog. Thanks again.
Lynne April 18, 2009 6:00

Dear Bill,
I know you need a break but I will miss you for sure.
Thanks a lot for all the help and moral support.
Enjoy your vacation Bill.
Good luck!. And Thanks Again.

-lynne-
Lynne April 17, 2009 7:45

I'm happy Bill you liked it!
-lynne-
Lynne April 16, 2009 18:09

Hi Bill,
I just dropped by to say thank you.
I hope you'll get used to this kind of greetings from me.
Have a nice day!
-lynne-
Nadiyah April 16, 2009 17:10

Hi Bill, Thanks a lot ...

Really I use a lot of symbolism in this mypoem, may be also its other. In ‘That Man …’ many use it examples almost dead,hanging out, Running in the bunch of Cambodia, not spring, and mymissing drops.I want to say in this poem that he so need someone.

So sorry, myenglish not good. I try say about my first poem in English translate :
first, in “he almost dead”. I trying to say he so need care, love, or anything from someone but not me. That mean not dead actually, but relation with emotional tightness.

second, word ‘missing’,may be didnt right used it. May be Its mean longing. I don’t know which its right between ‘missing’ and ‘longing’ on “tightness missing and tightness longing” so also with the word mymissing (or mylonging).

Third, Hanging out. Its symbolism.his love or longing for someone unrequited. Then that is told hanging out. His love or his longing hanging out.it shows itself. he is showing something about himself.

Forth, you are rights, Trying to release means attempting to let go of something and it means trying to be released and freedom …

Fifth, Running in the bunch of cambodia. Yes, Running can be a symbol of getting away from something or going to a new place. Really Bunch of Cambodia is difficult to understand. But mymean its is bunch of Cambodia tree, not translated Cambodia country. Or its mean (Running in the bunch of Cambodia not spring), he do something useless.I understand you if don’t understand the symbolism here.

Sixth, Useless. You are right, its mean something is useless to do because it won't help him. He is useless to try to change the situation.So also with There's only one way means there is only one solution to the problem.

Seventh, my missing drops – You ask me : is this the only solution? I answer :Yes only solution. May be that right word is mylonging. Its symbolism, mean he only need me, mylove, mycare etc. not mean tear drops from crying.

Ok myteacher, I saying that it is difficult. I hope you can help me …

Nice day,

-Nadiyah-

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Amirah Berniah Ardini Abdullah April 16, 2009 14:16

It's definitely the second one, Bill. Being able to do things we love; it's not the money but the satisfaction counts. Sometimes I use my own pocket money buying teaching aids and all. It makes me less rich but happy and satisfied. That's the beauty of doing things that we love. Do you agree with me?