This is my second essay here, I have checked it over in order to eliminate
some basic mistakes.
I don't know if there will be somebody who notice my post and reply to me.But , I HOPE!
In general, sending children to the day school is most of parents' choice , however, in recent years, the boarding schools have become more popular than before .Some parents bewildered which one is better for children ,should I send my child to a boarding school instead of traditional school ? In my opinion, there is no definitely better one , but have a fitting one for each different family.
The boarding school's feature is to strictly manage the calendar of student's study and living with professinal methods and advanced facilities. In addition, children have more time to play ,study ,conmunicate with their peers ,and parents don't worry about children are alone when they are focus on work ,and have no time to accompany them. Away from families' care, children have to learn to be independent on living and thinking ,after all, teachers in school are not able to attend each student carefully enough.
Theoretically speaking, boarding school's advantage is more than day school .
But, the costs of boarding school is too high to afford for normal families. Meanwhile, from the emotional aspect, it will take less time to stay at home with parents that cannot be accepted by a lot of children and parents. The two reasons significantly lead people to choose the day school except that some parents are too busy for work to take care of their children.
The day schools' cost is less while parents could have more time with their children.Moreover,the same with the boarding school or ever better than(some of day school were supported by government),most of the day school still have the capability of educating children with good advanced facilities.
All in all, which type of school should be chosen according to the different families' real situations. We cannot assure the better one but the fitter one.After all, brilliant person are not from the same type of school or education form , success are attribute to individual hard work.
some basic mistakes.
I don't know if there will be somebody who notice my post and reply to me.But , I HOPE!
In general, sending children to the day school is most of parents' choice , however, in recent years, the boarding schools have become more popular than before .Some parents bewildered which one is better for children ,should I send my child to a boarding school instead of traditional school ? In my opinion, there is no definitely better one , but have a fitting one for each different family.
The boarding school's feature is to strictly manage the calendar of student's study and living with professinal methods and advanced facilities. In addition, children have more time to play ,study ,conmunicate with their peers ,and parents don't worry about children are alone when they are focus on work ,and have no time to accompany them. Away from families' care, children have to learn to be independent on living and thinking ,after all, teachers in school are not able to attend each student carefully enough.
Theoretically speaking, boarding school's advantage is more than day school .
But, the costs of boarding school is too high to afford for normal families. Meanwhile, from the emotional aspect, it will take less time to stay at home with parents that cannot be accepted by a lot of children and parents. The two reasons significantly lead people to choose the day school except that some parents are too busy for work to take care of their children.
The day schools' cost is less while parents could have more time with their children.Moreover,the same with the boarding school or ever better than(some of day school were supported by government),most of the day school still have the capability of educating children with good advanced facilities.
All in all, which type of school should be chosen according to the different families' real situations. We cannot assure the better one but the fitter one.After all, brilliant person are not from the same type of school or education form , success are attribute to individual hard work.
Replies
hi, Idealist!
I must say that I was really excited when seeing your discussion here, for I really expect other members to actively join the group.
I've read your essay carefully and found out some following mistakes:
1. most of parents' => most parents. When there is no article or possessive pronoun, you use “most” only.
Most of: Most of them, most of the students, most of his time
2. fitting one for each different family => suitable one for each particular family
You use “fit” when you talk about “size”, “suitable” when talking about “characteristic”
3. calendar of student's study and living => studying and living schedule / curriculum
4. parents don't worry about children are alone when they are focus on work=> parents don’t have to worry about their children (worry that their children are alone) when they focus on work (when they are concentrated on work)
5. the costs of boarding school is => the costs (fees) of boarding school are
6. from the emotional aspect => in terms of emotion/ as regards emotional aspect
7. some of day school => some day schools (the same mistake to “most”)
Hope that you can get something from my comment. If you have any wonder, please reply me. See you!
Best Regard!
thanks your proofread, I think they are right all !