Please help me rewrite following sentences into two, or in a better sentence without causing any confusion.
With that, Creepella, Shivereen, who is Creepella's niece, and Bitewing, who is Creepella's pet bat, get into Creepella's car so that they can reach the mansion.
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With that, Creepella, Shivereen (Creepella's niece), and Bitewing(Creepella's pet bat), get into Creepella's car so that they can reach the mansion.
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With that, Creepella, Creepella's niece (Shivereen), and Creepella's pet bat (Bitewing), get into Creepella's car so that they can reach the mansion.
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two or more better sentences, without increasing word count or overhead.
Thanks for helping...
Charan
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