Hi Sara,
How are you doing?
While, I was in a taxi this morning on my way to work, and I overheard some girls talking many good things about you.
They said. You are a very good girl who behaves well whenever you are among them. You have good manner of approach. You always perform well in your exams. You like to mingle with good people who will make positive impacts in your life. You love to do good things during your leisure time. You have good relationships with all of your team mates. You perform well in all of the activities carry on in school. And you have good leadership skills because you do all of your assignments well and on time as their team leader.
That tells me that, you are indeed a good girl who means well for her life and the life of others. Keep on the good work Sara.
Best,
Komala
To all of my fellow EC members,please correct me for error!!!!
Comments
@ Anele okay thanks for the observation, I am going to correct them now
@Sara thanks so much for your nice comment
@ Luci, thanks so much for your comment
Hi Komala... Nice to see you writing your next blog!
For my correction:
You started your blog in past tenses:
Well, I was in a taxi this morning heading for work, I overheard some group of girls talking many good things about you.
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Why not be consistent? Write the rest in past tense. Anyway, the story happened already so it is safe to use the past tenses of the verbs.
Like.......They said that you are were a very good girl who behaved well whenever you are were among them.
Did you get it?
It's very nice Komala and you used simple words. who are learners, (like me)they can understand easily.
Excellent writing! Thanks for trying this week's writing prompt.
Re corrections: Here do you mean "Well" or "While"?
Well, I was in a taxi this morning heading for work, I overheard some group of girls talking many good things about you.
If you mean "While", you can remove the comma:
While I was in a taxi this morning on the way to work, I overheard some group of girls talking saying many nice things about you.
Or, maybe you are answering someone's question and "Well" is just a form of exclamation:
Q: How was your day today?
A: Well, I was in a taxi this morning on the way to work, and I overheard some girls saying many nice things about you.
Very good Momala..It is very simple piece of writing, easy to get its message.I like it, sister;)
It was nice to read, simple and easily understandable.
Thanks so much for the observation my dear friend.
Nicely written.
Observation:
Maybe instead of comma, you can use 'period' or 'full stop' in between sentences. Using comma is making your sentences too long.