Adaline, let me help you to make it into two sentences if you don't mind. :)
Sheila’s father is a surgeon who always works in the night shift. She is wondering why, but today he reveals his secret to her that he is a 'Vampire'.
Better: Sheila is wondering why her father who is a surgeon always works in the night shift. Today he reveals his secret to her that he is a 'Vampire'.
Hmmm .. a surgeon Vampire... No wonder the hospital always in need of lots of blood bags when he was doing the surgeries. It was for him and not his patients. LOL
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Dear Onee Chan, Thank you so much for correcting it for me. I really appreciate that. It's better now is in it.
She would think that she need blood, too. :p
Adaline, let me help you to make it into two sentences if you don't mind. :)
Sheila’s father is a surgeon who always works in the night shift. She is wondering why, but today he reveals his secret to her that he is a 'Vampire'.
Better: Sheila is wondering why her father who is a surgeon always works in the night shift. Today he reveals his secret to her that he is a 'Vampire'.
Dear Tanjin & Setarah, Thank you so much for liking
Dear Noaslpls, It's true. Thanks for reading and comment. I appreciate that.
Dear Dara Gno, Thank you for reading and liking
Hmmm .. a surgeon Vampire... No wonder the hospital always in need of lots of blood bags when he was doing the surgeries. It was for him and not his patients. LOL
Akohomoda Adaline Bala, Ena vendum? I am afraid of Christoper Lee, Vincent Price and Peter Cushing. When I see them, I cannot sleep.
Yes Elen, I think so. Thanks for reading
Dear Afro, Yes he is!
Thanks for reading sweet heart
That means that she is a Vampire too??? :o So shocking for her!
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