That is the story about a pirate although you can't believe he exists in a virtual reality created by two young men in a university's room. These young are boys passionates by develop characters in virtual world.
The story was developed in a solitary island in the caribbean sea, there the pirate live in a small town when he is not at sea. In this town the people that live there has a very problem, is what they are gossip. They all the time speaking about the life of other persons, like they don't see anymore people they have to speak about them. But there a legend in that town that the person what find a horseshoe in that island that people is safe of the gossiping, because the people there believed that object has the property of call the good luck.
Some day the pirata was in his ship when a girl approached him and she told him that and the ship has a broken part on the bottom. The pirate was impressed for the way that girl knew that damage. The pirate asked her why she knew the damege in the ship, and she answered that has x-ray eyes.
PD:Thanks to Marisa's Giant Storymaker for her tool!!!.
Comments
Oh thank you so much Mishaikh and Tara for yours tips...please excuse me for my grammar but i really didn't have many time to write the story but i wanted participate in the blog.
Regards ;)
In this town the people who live there have a big problem, is that they are gossip.”
“The people who live in this town have a big problem, is that they are gossip.”
“In this town the people who live there, are gossip mongers.”
“In this town the people who live there, are addicted to gossiping”
In case any of you are wondering, Carlos chose the number 25 and got the following for this Writing Challenge:
Character: a pirate
Place: in virtual reality
Situation: gossiping
Object: a horseshoe
His second character was #26 :"a girl with x-ray eyes".
Carlos,
Thanks for being the first to take this month's Writing Challenge! The Giant Storymaker is fun, isn't it?
English Tip: I think it would make more sense if you started with "This". "This is the story..."
Let's work on this very important sentence together. Can you split this sentence into two?
"In this town the people that live there has a very problem, is what they are gossip."