It was a late morning. Children were playing with great enthusiasm.It seemed, their life depended on it! There was a nice pathway beside the front lawn which went towards the lowly but beautiful house. Flower-plants were beside the rocky pathway. And, they were in full blossom.
The sky was still- clear! It was a bit hot. Their mother was busy with household works. Tree-leaves were flickering in the sunlight. And, a yellow colored little unknown bird was nibbling into a bough to make a hole. Life seemed still and sweet.
Suddenly the little girl of that group watched a man. A man with a shabby black coat. '' Who is he, why does he enter into our own premises?'' She rushed towards him and asked him what did he want.
Then to her surprise, she saw there was something in his those blue deep eyes! What was there? Was there a desire or struggle or a hope or anything else?
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Thanks for correction.
Very descriptive writing! I can visualize in my mind the scenes that are played out here in your words. It makes me excited to know what caused the surprise! Hope you give us the next scene! :)
If I may correct this:
There was a nice pathway besides the front lawn. Which which went towards the lowly beautiful house. (This should be joined together as one sentence because the second sentence that begins with "which" cannot stand by itself, it is merely a phrase and has no complete thought.)
Good job!
You were trying to describe what happened in the wonderful morning - nice try!
By the way, some mistaks in the blog (most of them might be typos, though):
'...pathway besides beside the front lawn. , Which which went towards...'
' besides beside the rocky pathway'
'unknown bird were was nibbling'
'A man with in a shabby'
Maybe you should have proofread the blog before you published it.
The thought is good. Specially the description of nature sounds good.
nice article, what will be happening next ?
corrections...please