Dear All !
I'm so happy to read your comments! Many thanks to you all! You have to know one thing. I love to read and watch thrilllers. I love black humor... So my "hero" won't be a good boy! :-p
I want to write a story which is jubilatory. The story of a man who switches into his past, his mind and his deepest feelings. He is happy, it's true. If he thinks about his life, he know he has everything. His life is a happiness-lined road.
Unfortunatly, the way he has been treated by his client has throwed him into black feelings.
All that he knows is that he has something to do. He still doesn't know exactly what...
But he has to do it. To be far away of his old daemons...
(Please, feel free to tell about my mistakes...)
Comments
Thank you for sharing us ....keep on .
Bill, giggling~ [blushing* it was a typo~]
@ Bill : Many thanks for your advice. Writing such a story in a foreign language is not so easy. Because of a lack of vocabulary and grammar difficulties. I will ensure that the second part is more elaborate.
Well, you have to use the past simple which is the standard tense used to describe actions chronically when telling a story. Then at the inn you have to focus essentially on building blocks of your sentences and you need to be more creative and this can easily be done by using the senses of your narrator and try to imagine every details of your storyline and also you've to try adding some variations. Besides, if you want to write your short stories you might want to share it here as well http://www.protagonize.com/
Anyway, that would be a story i would really want to read, keep going.
and for the mistakes i think that Mickey corrected some of them, but she forget the singular of "men" which is "man"
Good luck
Best regards :)
@ Mickey : Thank you for your corrections. Punctuation seems to be one of old daemons! ;-) :-)
I'm glad you like the story...
@ Shabeen : Many thanks ! :-)
@ Mickey : Thank you for your corretions. Punctuation seems to be one of old daemons ! ;o)
1.comments ! ---> comments!
all ! ---> all!
2.a men who switch ---> who switches
he know ---> he knows
He still don't ---> still doesn't
I like the story~