Hello, dear friends and members here!

I am not a writer and also not as good at English. But I think writing poems and tales, is a good way to express our mind and to reach improvement in the English language as well as get progress. I am about writing a short tale and I invite everyone to read and to comment it  .... or even to correct my mistakes. I will write chapters and publish them here as fast as I can.

Let's start!

                                 Chapter one: The arrival
 
After a long journey, she reaches the Indian Ocean.
She has rented a little wooden house on a small island direct at the lonely beach. She doesn't like to stay at crowded beaches with hotels. She was seeking for long to find this island and the woman, who's the owner of the house, told her, it is very lonely there. Only sometimes comes a sailor with his boat to this place in the Indian Ocean, to take water from the natural found and to stay for few days before they sail away again.

It seems to be the perfect place for her to relax, to swim, to discover the surrounding and to write poems. It will be inspiring to be far from civilization in a house without television and internet connection. Electricity comes from a generator, located in a small shed behind the house. At least so told her the landlady.

The only luxury what she allows herself is a radio for listening to the News and the weather forecast. The radio contains a recorder for playing music discs. She loves to write while music is playing. All of her friends asked her if she is crazy to stay completely alone on the island, but she was laughing and asked back what they think what could happen. Namely nothing!

She is waiting for the landlady's son. He brings her to the island by boat. She enjoys the boat trip very much. It will be sunset soon, and she is surprised how quiet the ocean seems to be before the sundown. She has closed her eyes and inhales the smell of the salty water while she can feel the rays of the sun warming her face. She smiles in anticipation of the island and the wooden house.

She is curious, excited, and nervous. Finally, she arrives.The young man helps her with carrying the baggage to the house.
He says goodbye and leaves her. She watches after him for a moment and opens the door. The old wood creaks a little. She does not know what she will find inside the house although the friendly lady had told her everything should be ok.

"Oh my gosh!" That's all that she can say. "How beautiful and amazing!" She didn't have expected such a romantic flair.
Staying here for the next weeks will be very lovely.  It's clean, in proper order and everything is at the right place.
She looks in the living room that has lovely light blue painted wooden furniture. A good view in front of the white walls.  
Paintings on the walls show romantic scenes and there hanging also some shelves with books. In front of a wall, stands a sofa with the same fabric color like the furniture color. There are lots of pure-white soft pillows on the sofa.  Two armchairs complete the seat group. In front of the opposite wall is a fireplace. It is a little strange to have a fireplace here because of the temperatures in this area of the world.

She smiles and opens the windows to let fresh air into the room. A warm wind breeze brings the smell of salt.  She can even taste it on her tongue. It's quiet, only the songs of birds fill the air.
It is peaceful around her. Her strong emotions make her cry. She mops with her hand about her eyes. She feels how the emotions and sensations start to overwhelm her.

She takes a deep breath and continues to discover the other rooms of the house.
There is a small kitchen with a stove, an oven, a fridge, and there are cabinets with pots, pans, dishes, and cutlery in the cabins and the fridge is full of some groceries. There is some meat, cheese, bread, butter, eggs, milk, salad, fruits, mineral water and in the cabinet above the sink she finds respectively coffee and tea, and also flour, salt, pepper and some spices, sugar, some rice, and pasta. On a sideboard next to the oven stands a kettle, a toaster, and coffee maker. In the middle of the kitchen stands an old restored wooden table with four chairs. There is a basket on the table with vegetables, onions, garlic, tomatoes, and potatoes.

The mass of food is enough to survive for the first week. Then the landlady's son will bring more.

Caroline leaves the kitchen to see what upstairs is. There are two rooms, a bedroom and probably a guest room and there is also a bathroom.  Except for a desk with an old typewriter on it, are the rooms similarly furnished, only the bed in the bedroom is much larger than the bed in the guest room. The sheets on the beds are white as also the blankets and pillows, only the pillows and blankets in the bedroom have small red roses woven into the fabric. It gives the room a romantic appearance.
The bathroom has only a shower. It doesn't matter because there is the greatest bathtub in front of the house, the sea.

After she has seen everything in the house and she thinks it is time to pick up her baggage from downstairs.  She is choosing a negligee, lays it on the bed and goes downstairs to cook a tea in the kitchen.

 While she waits for boiling water, she turns on her small radio to listen to the weather forecast. They say it will become stormy tonight.  Being inside the wooden house is good, it seems to be stable and safe. She is thinking so because the house is old and it has survived so many storms in the past. Before she goes sleeping, she should not forget to close the windows very carefully. She loves sleeping with wide opened windows to listen to the waves of the sea, but it will be better not to do it this night.

She has sweetened the tea with three little spoons sugar, so the smells and tastes delicious. She puffs before she takes a sip because the tea is hot.
She puts the teacup into the sink, goes upstairs to have a shower. It takes a little time until the water has the right temperature. She feels tired but also relaxed under the warm water.
She turns off the big lamp in the bedroom and uses the small one what is standing on a small table next to the bed. She is tired but still too excited to sleep. She takes a book to read some pages. Usually, it helps her, to fall asleep very quickly. It works as always. She doesn't notice how quickly the sleep comes and so she has still her book on her belly while she starts to dream.


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  • :) Very describing of every detail, you are a good storyteller Rose. One can imagine how everything looks like and also the mood in the story.

    I don't know whether this will be of any help, below are just some suggestions, it is completely up to you whether you want make the changes or not.

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    "Her eyes are closing, and she inhales the smell of the salty water, and she enjoys the sun."

    Correction;
    She has closes her eyes and inhales the smell of the salty water while she can feel the rays of the sun warming her face.

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    "She does not know what she will find inside the house thought the friendly lady had told her everything should be ok."

    Correction;
    She does not know what she will find inside the house thought ( though )the friendly lady had told her everything should be ok.

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    "The tea smells and tastes delicious.  She has sweetened the tea with three little spoons sugar, it smells and tastes delicious. She puffs before she takes a sip because the tea is hot."

    Correction;
    She likes the nice smell of the tea and enjoys the taste as she has sweetened the tea with three spoons of sugar...

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    It is an interesting story, I will be looking forward to the next chapter. Other thing, your English is fine and you are a good writer - elsewise you wouldn't be able to create something like this. I am not just saying this to please you, this is my honest opinion, so please keep it up :)
  • Thank you, Susana. I will publish the next chapter soon. Thanks for your nice comment.

  • You are so smart and sensitive, dear Mishaikh.

    When I could to make you feel being inside of the house, I did not make wrong. Thanks ... I will feed your curiosity for the next chapter as soon as possible.

  • A very wonderful story. .eagerly waiting for next chapter. ..thanks ma'am for sharing your beautiful writing.
  • Thanks, KITTY. I will post the next chapter as soon as possible

  • .......................and to write poems.

    It reminds me 'Rose' (You).

    Very meticulously you have defined the details of the surrounding in the house.  I was finding myself in person on the place.

    Good make me zealous to read more.....................soon hope so.

  • How crazy she is!

    But i know that great poems are often published by people like her.

    I hope I will get a chance to enjoy the poems of herself. So I'm curious about next chapter.

  • :)

  • Hi, Roman! Thanks for your comment. And a thousand thanks for your correction. You are right. I had double sentences at the end of paragraph 8. Hahaha, although I had read it more than once, I did not notice that. Thanks again !!!!

  • Hi, Rose! I like your story! I like the meaning of it. I also think that while living in such places people can feel, that they first of all live on the planet "Earth", and only after that, in the cities... Living in lonely places like that, people are becoming closer to the nature. And the human mind is cleansed. I like to read and imagining all the details in that house, especially that squeaky door:) And i think, you made one mistake in the end of 8 paragraph. There are doubled two last sentences... Thank you for sharing your story! I am waiting to read next chapter!

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