This is story of a small town girrl name piya who run away from her home to full fill her dream ,to become a bollywood super star so she came in mumbai which we called city of Stars...piya is pretty,charming girl, she jst lyk a queen of heart , she win every one's heart,she is littlebit crazy and she is a fighter too..piya came to. Mumbai to her friend tiya ......piya have had come mumbai but she didnt know how she will start, how her dream will come true..??Bt she didnt fright from any thing ,she was a brave gal. she starts planning, looking for opportuniyy she start doing some small roles for earn money. ............to be counti...actully this my first blog and i am writting first Time
Welcome to the world English bloggers. It's a commendable effort that you have put into writing for the first time.
Just an observation, or two
1. It is better to use full stop in between sentences/ideas. For example, in your sentence "piya is pretty,charming girl, she jst lyk a queen of heart,". This sentence can be divided into two sentences "Piya is a pretty and charming girl. She is just like a Queen of Heart."
2. Usage of capital letters. For a proper noun/name, you should capitalised the first letter. In your sentence "town girrl name piya who run away". You should capitalised the first letter of Piya, because it's a proper name. Maybe you can have a look at this article in MyEC to learn more about it.
3. Try to avoid using 'text chat' while doing English writing. For example in your sentence, "jst lyk". Try to spell it fully "just like".
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well done nikita.. keep writing -:)
Welcome to the world English bloggers. It's a commendable effort that you have put into writing for the first time.
Just an observation, or two
1. It is better to use full stop in between sentences/ideas. For example, in your sentence "piya is pretty,charming girl, she jst lyk a queen of heart,". This sentence can be divided into two sentences "Piya is a pretty and charming girl. She is just like a Queen of Heart."
2. Usage of capital letters. For a proper noun/name, you should capitalised the first letter. In your sentence "town girrl name piya who run away". You should capitalised the first letter of Piya, because it's a proper name. Maybe you can have a look at this article in MyEC to learn more about it.
3. Try to avoid using 'text chat' while doing English writing. For example in your sentence, "jst lyk". Try to spell it fully "just like".