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Short Story Challenge: Sweet torture

Posted by Rabab on April 9, 2015

Here is my entry for Luci's short story challenge. I tried to make it within the limit of 70 words but failed miserably hehehe I know the plot is awkward I wanted to take the challenge so badly so forgive me .

He couldn’t decipher the alien feeling he felt whenever he accidentally ran into her. One minute he was peacefully loading his shopping cart with toilet paper rolls; and the second he was brutally invaded with a hurricane of rampant emotions. She muttered shy greetings and hurried away cheeks blushing. Soaking in the light of this juvenile feeling; he knew he was destroying the barriers he set around his heart and bringing it back from its safety island. But he didn’t care. Just a small smile from her acts as a knife that shreds through all his fears and dare him to give up to this sweet torture called love.

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Rabab April 16, 2015 15:02

@Robbie

Thanks so much for dropping by.I will keep up writing if you promise to keep up reading ;)

Cheers
Robbie April 15, 2015 11:59

What can I say? Your blog is succinct! Keep it up! :)
Rabab April 13, 2015 17:21

@Bob
You have never failed me :) from the very start you encouraged me with your comments on my blogs and each time I read them I feel blessed.
Thanks a lot.
Mr. Bob April 13, 2015 4:31

Short but sweet, Rabab. It is nice to see you writing.
Lady Anne April 12, 2015 14:04

Yeah... I am also waiting for the other girls to come alive here.

It will look like a reunion of the wow gals....

This could really be WOW!
Rabab April 12, 2015 10:39

@ Anele.

Wow a masterpiece! I am flattered :)

Thanks for your precious words. My joy for being back to blogging is doubled because you my friends liked it. It means so much to me. And i have to admit I am also amazed that it turned out better than I thought. I can surprise my self sometimes lol

I am waiting for all of you to be back so I can be motivated to write again ;)

Love
Rabab April 12, 2015 10:32

@Luci Thanks I am glad you like it. You should take the credit because your challenge is inspiring it brought me out of my laziness cocoon hehehe

Keep it up and invite me to your future challenges please.
Lady Anne April 11, 2015 11:34

GOSHHH..... Your thinking is unfathomable!

I never have an idea that you would come up with a short story with the meatiest substance I've ever known.

I love every word you stitched together to form such a concise and meaningful sentences. Oh my, you just succeeded in trying to convey the thought that it didn't take a lot of words to come up with a masterpiece like this. OUCH! (for your followers!) hehehe

One of my favorite lines:

"brutally invaded with a hurricane of rampant emotions."

CARRY IT ON, LEADER, with great Pride. This is really WOW!
Luci April 11, 2015 8:35

wooow, awesome story! Don't be so modest plz! :D Thanx for participating dear Rabab, it was my pleasure to read your blog ;-)
Rabab April 10, 2015 21:21

Dear Sad Sunset I am so happy to see you here and especially seeing your words on my blog post. Stormed heart ha? It seems that you have experienced this feeling before kekeke would you like to write a blog about this? I wonder who had the honour of making you feel this powerless and smitten?