Sorry, dear Onee, at a time I used four words from your list, I have limited time, so I had to do it. Please don't mind or spare me getting a punishment for breaking the rules.
In my heart, the lamp of love developing gradually
My existence is valueless without you.
If the certainty force you to forget me,
My heart will be separated from my bodies.
My heart is beating and my mind keeps busy
To guard of the sweet memories with you
Even a little distance makes me restless
Every other second, you remind me of your absence
All my time and every breath are for you.
Wherever you go, your heart persistently be with me
Whether you are with me or not
You always flow in my veins and blood.
I am lost in you in such a Zephyr way,
The entire world catches me as colorful Rendezvous.
You are my panacea for all the battles and Pyrrhic victory.
PS: Zephyr: A soft gentle breeze
Rendezvous: A meeting at an agreed time and place.
Panacea: a solution or remedy for all difficulties or diseases, It is something that people think will solve all their problems.
Pyrrhic: Successful with heavy losses (get joy or pleasure after tremendous suffering or losses). A victory that is won, but at too great a cost.
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Dear Soba! I can't write poems , dear. whatever comes out it is the result of after torturing my brain randomly. Do you want me to give pain of my poor brains? Hahaha. Thank you, dear.
Dear Onee! I am so glad you made the corrections and appreciated your time and efforts. Dear,after a long break your such awesome challenge trigger the environment to take part of it happily. But, what are happening here, dear, if someone discourages then not possible to continue learning, we are not master in poems, as you gave us an opportunity to take the challenge , so we came up otherwise not, because this platform is becoming the place of argument and finding others fault. whatever we wrote , may be thinking in a positive way, I wonder if people only knows to give inspirations for the purpose of great motivation.
Btw, dear ..The entire world catches me as colorful Rendezvous. .. I wanted to express that , being love, the entire world looks me the place of meeting. the full world looks like a meeting place.
I am so happy having a sweet friend here. May Allah blessed you, dear.
It's hard to believe that it's your first poem, dear Serene. It expresses the poet's yearning for his/her lover in an impressive way. Thank you for writing a post for us after a long gap.
Dear Serene,, ^_^
I really love the poem you made. That is awesomely WOW. In the poetry, grammar is usually ignored, as the poet writes in free style...and it is written in lines. Here, let me just correct a small grammar mistake with my fair knowledge, dear. :)
Btw, I love all the lines especially the last line. "You are my panacea for all the battles and Pyrrhic victory". So touchy..... It is so deep feeling. I looooove it. Why should this be the last poem...? nooooo, please.... Keep it up, dear! You have a talent at this. And you used four words... well done! Serene, your coming here is not in vain.
Sooo happy to see you back! ^_^
Thank you so very much, dear, Kal,Risty Aven, AG, Batuhan, Marshaa ,Evangelina , bet ,ELF-Noor for leaving your motivational comments and inspirations. I am honored because this is my first poem. I appreciate it highly. You all make me happy and boosted my motivation. Wish you the best.
I am trying to change, thanks for taking your time and pressing the magical button.
So sweet dear,
nice Poem....
BTW how are you?
thanks for the meaning of those new words!
I love your lovely poem and love you dear serene.
WOW, Serene.. it's very deep poem.. Though I am not fond of English poetry.. but I like it so much.. Really great :)
Serene, it's like I'm missing someone and I want to be with that person when reading your poem. There is warm love that is willing to give but not sure if somebody will take it. Thanks for sharing this to us and joining the challenge. :)
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