My insane hallucination
This all is just my crazy imagination,
my dream, my weird hallucination.
I created this world I am living in,
Angel or Devil? Both can't win...
Either I am an angel with fake smile,
or cool devil pretending to be fragile.
Please, don't cry, it is unfair, I know,
just choose one and let's start the show.
You hardly decide so easily and fast,
to avoid own mistakes from the past.
But it is challenging to play with fire,
chasing wild angel, feeling desire...
This time you badly failed, you are lost,
your angel turned out to be scary ghost!
Devil with pure heart was clear winner,
now you will burn in the hell, you sinner!
Comments
I love the final line! XD
*applauses!*
Wow, I like your poem so much. I tried also several time to write a poem, sometimes it was good and sometimes I made some mistakes... hahaha, but the poet always can say: it is his "artistic freedom"... I like your poem and Danny's, too ... congratulation you have well done!
I didn't miss the chance to catch you in red handed lol.
Sorry I forgot to leave my opinions on your excellent poetry.
Of course you have a good hand to write poems! I like both types of poems- which depicts poet's mind clearly and that is where we can apply our own imaginations to decode poet's idea!
Luci, Reading this, I've been dizzy for a while. :) :D
The hallucination you have is worth. The same rhyme poem you made is awesome. It is seriously WOW....! :)))
I'm so glad to see your participation.Thank you so much. ^_^
Wait....! You said "only psychos or druggies are familiar with this word :D". ???????? Wondering.....mmm....... :D
I created this world I am living in,
Angel or Devil? Both can't win.
I felt it mean between good and evil?However,Your suggestion so clear.You have given a Very interesting and meaningful message.Appreciate your patiently and decently presentation. Thanks for sharing dear Luci.
First and for most, after reading all the lines I come across a conclusion that your poem exhibits the signs of great poetry in terms of rhyming using couplet of meter and I think your poem can be classified as an "Elegy" where it tackles a positive dilemma between two more negative ideas and a paradoxical depiction of the red devil with a pitchfork and white angel with a light bulb on the head and open wings that both put you in a scrupulous and melancholic situation and made you struggle with simplicity of choosing between the good and the bad, we can also notice a retrospective thinking in your second line of the 3rd verse but we ignore what really happened in the past and that makes you struggle with your dilemma. All in all, I really enjoyed reading your poem filled with a lavishly outstanding imagination. Keep your flight of fantasy on the right way :)
I will call your poem " the battle between angel and devil." It was very nice, well done!
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