My Prince
by : Nadiyah
Who are you … ?
Why are you so special?
Until I have hobbled hopefully asking,
I hardly afforded to reach you, and pawned my heart to God?
Wailing every night, I was unable to stop
Who are you, so special in the eyes of God?
Until I had to crawl to walk towards morning
As the afternoon went up, reminding me
As dusk falls bringing hope to others, boredom over coming me
Until the night drew slowly to comfort me to my sleep
Who are you? Someone dressed in greatness
Like a prince on horseback, so enchanting
So handsome and elegant with decorations on head
In each morning greeting, with a friendly
Reminds of my lunch.
the evening and the nights before, that bothered my sleep.
Who are you who always reminded me of something?
On the principles of life, guiding and giving instruction
In my world, which promises happiness
In the hereafter, in my eternal life
Once cool, make my soul fly … I cannot stand up
Really, I don’t know you
You're mysterious, as you come in my dreams in your clothing of greatness
White, clean, like a holy man who came from afar
Has God sent you for me?
I'm not able to answer, touching in my gladness
wonder in my confusion
Now my heart has been trapped on and ... be hooked by!
Ooh ... Who are you?
(Tuesday, August 15, 2006)
-Nadiyah-
Comments
The first verse, it is a continuous unity so that I didn't use the interrogative sentence, as you asked, check to the previous verses. (using dots or commas in these verses is very important).
I corrected the second verse : And God sent you for me? ----> Has God sent you for me?
Glad I can share my feelings with you ;)
thanks dear Halima, your questions was so precious to me. Big thanks :)
I will send Sura Al-Fatiha for him, hope I've put a smile on his face :)
thanks again, my dear Halima ...!
Oohh poor Nadiyah :)) You caught many mistakes on my verses, actually I wrote with my feelings and not care about the grammar, really poor hehehe ...
Ok I will take the time to correct them, thanks!
do step by step when you want to write a poem in English
first, write your feelings in Indonesian then you translate it into English
second, ask to your friend to correct your poem after that you can posting it
take care,
-Nadiyah-
and I thank to someone helped me
-Nadiyah-
-Nadiyah-
Well done, It is great effort,
Osman
it makes me a little smile ... welcome!
-Nadiyah-
I wish i read your poem when I was much younger.
-
1
-
2
-
3
of 3 Next