This was my second vacation with Gizem. Firstly we went to Bodrum for honeymoon in August 2014. It was a wonderful vacation and we enjoyed very much. Gizem wanted to go to Bodrum by airplane, but I didn't want to get on it because of my acrophobia.So our journey took about a day and it wasn't a good experience. After we arrived to our hotel,we slept all day. And after this bad experience we decided to not use the bus for in the next time. We were going to English class when our friend recommended us to go to Antalya for summer vacation in 2015. And so we decided to go to Antalya by airplane. Because there are 800 kilometers between Istanbul and Antalya. If we went to Antalya by bus,it would take at least ten hours. Whenever I get on airplane, I get very nervous and always grumble. By the way, It was my wife's first experience to get on airplane and she was very relaxed even she took some photos in airplane. Our airplane journey took almost an hour. When we arrived at the hotel, we encountered some little troubles such as hotel room was not clean enough and sometimes our key didn't open the room's door. After we solved these problems,we went to the beach to swim. Our hotel was wonderful but there was lots of waves in the sea. So we didn't swim very well. After one or two days, I met my childhood friend whose name's Engin. I hadn't met him about ten years,before we met in the hotel. He had come there for honeymoon with his new wife. We spent perfect time with together. After a few days we had to return home, but Gizem and I decided to go to zoo before we went to airport. We saw some interesting animals such as lion,some special snake species. After that we made a short sightseeing tour in the city center.
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Hi, what a great trip you've been making. :D bet you keep on tracking your english class via skype, right ? That's the joy of learning online :D as I also do always with my team in Preply :D https://www.academia.edu/20058536/English_lessons_by_Skype_with_tut...
It is my first time to read a blog here . As a new student I really Enjoyed reading the blog . it is very nice .
Thank you for sharing with us .
Hi rysperski,
Thanks a lot for your advice I will notice after that. :)
Nice story Thunder, thanks for sharing with us.
@Rysperski: Thanks for the knowledge about grammar and writing style that you have shared with us, very useful. Everyone can learn from this including me.
Oi Thunder,
What a lovely blog. You were really lucky to be able to have such a fantastic time. I must also notice that your vocabulary is well above intermediate level, all you need is some training in composition. There were also some other shortcomings, but they did not lessen the joy of reading your blog.
I shall take the liberty and make some corrections:
Inatead of using - firstly - it would be better to write - During our first vacation we went....
next, in place of - i did not want to go in it - better write - i did not want to board it
in place of - bad experience - i would recommend using - unpleasant experience
After we arrived to our hotel, we slept all day - it would sound better to write - After having arrived at our hotel, we slept for the rest of the day.
after this bad experience - better write - after this unfortunate experience
not to use the bus for the next time -> not to take a bus next time.
when we were going to English class -> when we were attending English classes, one of our friends recommended....
we decided to go to Antalya by plane because it is 800km away from Istanbul.
..i get nervous and grumble a lot.
....my wife's first experience in flying in a plane.....and she even took....
...we encountered some minor problems like the room not being clean enough or not being able to open the door with our keys.
...we went to the beach for a swim/to have a swim, but we did not enjoy our swim as there were big waves on the sea.[skip - the hotel was wonderful - it has nothing to do with the conditions on the beach - you can put this text at the begininnng of the previous sentence - The hotel was wonderful although we encountered some minor troubles...]
A couple of days later, I met my childchood friend, Engin, whom i hadn't seen for over 10 years.
We spent a wonderful time together [without WITH]
....go to the zoo before going to the airport.
We saw some interesting animals, among the many - lions and different kinds of snakes.
Hmmmm...Thunder, please do not let my corrections discourage you from writing further blogs, on the contrary, wiser from the corrections, try to write another lovely blog.
Nasilsin Thunder, benim arkadas. Extend my regards to your wife and friends. I hope you add me among your friends.