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‘Prevention is better than cure’ such phrase exists because of the fact that prevention usually is a lot cheaper and effective to makes us stay healthy than curing it, which tends to a lot use of money and no guarantee that one will be back to a fit condition. This is of course a good life advice for individuals, but for national scale? To be able to warn people to take care of their health and actually having them doing it is a dream for every nation. But I believe we’re still far from that condition. As for now I believe that more budgets are needed to increase the quality and smoothed the approach of health education. But medical treatment must still have the biggest budget.

Firstly, medication treatment really demands a big amount of money than health campaign. This is because the nature of the medical treatment itself. Medicine and medical devices is not a cheap thing to buy. For example: medicines uses certain chemical that might be difficult to acquired, hence make it expensive; MRI, a big scanner for brain, is needed to scan tumors in brain or other anomalies. These kinds of medical treatment are something that must be owned in a health facility yet quite expensive to acquire. There still lots of sick people in the country who need to be taken care of. With this condition we cannot ignore them while start anew.

Secondly, the cost for health education and preventive measures surely won’t be as high as medical treatment. Health education uses less material because mostly it involves health campaign with medias (such as posters, videos, 3D models), vaccines, preventive chemical substance, which is a lot cheaper than to provide periodic medication for the ills. With such a low demand, it doesn't need abundance of money. Rational sum of budget will do just fine as long as the money can be used to improve its quality. The success can be viewed from how well the health education and preventive measure can increase society’s awareness in healthy life.

In conclusion, the government should give extra money for health education and preventive measure, but not so large because we still have to give medical treatment to the ill.