I went to the sea
to ask about you
Climbed steep mountains
to find you
Wondering into the woods
Asked neighbors
made several phone calls
Silence was there
Many days passed by
Pretending to forget
Then the Summer breeze told me
yesterday you went to the brook
to hear my voice.
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@ Dara, donnobad, I mi valo achi. Just two days ago we celebrated Bangoli new year! So, '' Suvo noboborsho".
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LOST AND GOT
Lost and found is more suitable.
nice poem Afro,thanks for sharing
Nice poem.
BUT as a comment I wanna say that as you have used mostly the natural elements in your poem such as see, mountains, woods and brook, and at the end the summer breeze has told you about your beloved, so it is better not to use "phone call" in your poem. In place of that you can write the following sentence as an example:
I stared to the shiny moon to see your face, but it wasn't complete.
Many days passed and just the caresses of sun's beam on my face have kept the light of hope in my heart alive.
Cheers!
Kimon achi afo, I like the summer breeze very much. Thanks for sharing delicate feelings.