Life fibers

 

 

 Life fibers

intertwined

in the dark plot

of a cosmic web...

here's what we are:

 embroideries

on huge spirals of the time.

 

My existence?

 

A  never unwound  roll

a tangle

of raw wool.

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  • I thank you ... thank you so much! It would not be right for you two now  if I do the fix , which you   have me suggested, because then  the others   cannot see how it was written before, and know what was wrong ... well, I will do when  I rewrite it on my collection. Thanks again! Until next time.
    Please correct me even now,  after that I wrote this, if I made mistakes. Thanks!
    _vindos_
  • I really do love it.  You had already changed "the" to "on" when I saw this. I agree with Josef.  It is wonderful.
  • Hi Josef, I appreciate your advice... ok,  thank you so much!
  • That's wonderful! Since you were asking for help on Bob's blog, the only thing I would change would be to delete "the" in the 7th line and let it read: "on huge spirals of time." But that's just my subjective view.
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