This is my first poem I post in here, since I realize I'm not into a poem xD
Should a poem consist of diction words that make people wonder?
Well, I'm not sure about this poem but in the case of learning, why not to try? :P
LIAR
Beautiful words always came out from your mouth
It magically turned her face
A wide curve showing rows of teeth lined neatly
Once, twice, thrice
Your fancy words had made her a queen
Four times,
The magical words faded away
A little curve on her lips still could be seen
In order to respect
Listened to your baloney
Watched how you were blithe
STOP!
The truth had been spoken
Tearing down your beautiful lies
Comments
Dear Rose, yeah you are right. And thanks for putting your nice comment here :)
Zzinaa?? What can I understand from your smile?o_____o
Hi Diah, no master has fallen from the sky yet. But we can try again and again to become better. Your poem is nicely written and I find your poem has a clear message. Lies kill love.
I can't agree more Sir Dara!
We have a saying here "as smart as the squirrels to jump will surely fall too"
Thanks Dara for your comment :)
Yea Roman, however people were born to be kind before the shits come hit people's perspective and behavior. So, there is no one who able to lying perfectly if we notice that. The best way to identity the liars is that they are not consistent of their words. They try to manage it well, but in the end, they will miss something important. Thanks Roman for your comment :)
thank you beki for your nice comment :)
Berbohong itu buruk! Lying is not good. The truth can be covered by some beautiful lies for a moment but that is only temporary. Did you see that poem (in that night)? Thanks, Diah for sharing.
Hi Diah!
You have expressed one of the manifestations of lie very well! Especially its influence on others.
With each next lie, it becomes clearer. Lie becomes visible and people see it, like if the truth was said by the false words.
Thank you for sharing.