Today is my mother's birthday. I planned to make a surprised for her. This evening, I called my father and told him what I had planning for my mom's birthday. On that time, my mom was not at home. She went to her friend's home. I called my brother to pick up her to going back to home. He lied to her that my father called her. When she arrived at home, she met my father and talked each other. I called again and asked father if they are ready to surprised her. My big brother came in and bring the cake and my other siblings sing a song, Happy birthday to you..It was a great moment that we we keep in our memories.
Please make correction to my writing tqsm.
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Thanks for your feedback Onee-chan...I will be improving my writing skill..
Great attempt to write, HAYANA!
I'm sure that your mom would burst into tears after that. :)
As you requested corrections, here is mine.
* make a surprise...
* and told him what I had planned for... [had planned=first event, told = second event]
* At that time,
* to pick her up to come back home.
* When she reached/got home,
* If they were ready to surprise her.
* came in and brought the cake and my other siblings sang a song
Nice to see you around! Keep writing! :)
Thanks for comments guys..I try my best to keep writing..
Keep writing....continuous writing will help you to achieve your goal! There are some grammar mistakes, i, e, tense....Anyway keep writing and Happy Birthday to your Mom!
Happy Birthday to your Mum =)
Hey I see you had a good time! Nice blog, keep it up. Thank you for sharing :)
Selamat ulang tahun untuk ibumu, Zyana! Please, extend my good wishes to her and to your brother, father, and the rest of your family. Good surprises make the person happy. Thanks, Zyana for sharing your happy moments with us. ,