"Haiku" is a traditional form of Japanese poetry. Haikus are short poems that consist of 3 lines. The first and last lines of a Haiku have 5 syllables and the middle line has 7 syllables. The word honey has 2 syllables: ho-ney; the word introduction has 4 syllables: in-tro-duc-tion. Haikus use sensory language which describes details observed by our five senses to express a feeling or image. These poems can depict:
An element of nature
*Falling to the ground
I watch a leaf settle down
In a bed of brown
A poignant experience
*A limp hand I hold
as the wind takes your last breath
the candle flickers
A funny experience
*Beans are kind to hearts.
I like to eat them daily.
and then do big farts!
Or even a riddle!
“What am I?”
*In a pouch I grow,
On a southern continent --
Strange creatures I know
(*Internet samples)
Let your inner poet come out and play! Create your own Haiku choosing a category you feel you can relate to ( poignant or funny experience, nature or a riddle) and oh by the way don’t forget to have fun along the way!
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The shortness of our lives helps us to gain wisdom to live it to the fullest, we pass this way only once but if we live it well, once is enough. Thanks again Mr. Jeffrey for this poignant haiku, very touching and very true. :)
@Ratu I was right! You have a poet's soul! Your poem is great as it is but if you want it to be a Haiku you have to follow the 5-7-5 rule of syllables so I suggest you just tweak some of the words but keep the thought of your poem intact. Like maybe you can do this:
Tears drop like a rain ( this part is correct)
None can stop it but yourself ( you can change no one to none so you have only a 1 syllable word instead of two because before your line has 8 but you see how you do not change the thought of your poem)
You alone can drain ( so it even rhymes with rain!)
This is just for the Haiku rule otherwise your poem is perfect in itself. Thank you Ratu for giving me as piece of your wisdom with this beautiful poem. :)
Anna dear you done so well! The sensory language of a haiku you got that one down, I am able to grasp the image of spring through your words. Never underestimate yourself, we all start somewhere when it comes to something new but then you will see as you did that you can actually be good in it! Thank you for challenging yourself with this poem. :)
@Mr. Jeffrey, Thank you for helping Anna out in my absence, you are a valuable teacher here on EC. :)
I like this one .
A season
Rhythm from the wind
My body feels like springtime
All green leaves swinging
Teacher Jeffrey , Thank you for making my haiku better .
Now , no wonder why you know Thai language . I fall in love with the beautiful nature and simple lifestyle of northern Thailand . I was in Chiang mai , Chiang rai and Mae hong son on my vacations many times . I have never stayed at Lampang once . I only passed this amazing province because I wanted to go as far and high as I could so every time my destination was not in Lampang ...
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A season
Rhythm from the wind
My body feels the spring
All green leaves swing
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Alice , I am not sure that " A season " is called Haiku , poem ,verse or prose . I tried to maintain sensory language and the rule of 5-7-5 .
Writing in English is difficult but writing Haiku is the most difficult :)
Sadness
Tears drop like a rain
no one can stop it but yourself
only you will drain it
Alice its hard .....but I will try to learn more
Yes that's true Mr. Jeffrey, the process of thinking about the rights words to express our thoughts in itself allows our senses to expand and we feel our words! :)
Hello Mr. Jeffrey, another soothing nature Haiku! Nature really has a way of bringing calm especially if it has something to do with water and with these lines you allow the senses to be immersed in it. Thanks, you are Haiku expert now! :)
Hi Eva good for you to do a research so now you can share your added knowledge on this and I am a lucky recipient of it! You got the first one right with 5-7-5 syllables but the second one although the thought is good but it doesn't follow the rule of the syllables because that is how you recognize a Haiku by the no of syllables in the 3 lines. However you can still keep your thought , just paraphrase it a little maybe something like this:
Live in flash hot light
Is it eternity's heart?
How to live without?
Just a suggestion to follow the haiku but anyway you cannot change the poet's words because they are theirs alone so I think it is better not to touch yours, it is perfect in itself. :)
Hi Keen Learner, just as your name suggests I am sure you will be able to do many things here since this is a learning site after all, you need just take a risk and try and the rest of us here are willing to help and encourage you! :)
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