He lost his way. He couldn't guess how long he was wandering along those streets which looked familiar to him, in the brightness of the days, in the darkness of the nights, nobody payed attention to him. The white snow on the pavement once he walked on turned into a brown slippery mud.Suddenly and out nowhere he came across his home. Will this nightmare finally end up for him? A tiny ray of hope appeared in the darkest and misterous night he remembered...Silence. A furious quietness was ruling the house. At the end of the corridor he could discern a weak light coming from the living room.There she was. His wife was lying on the sofa sleeping uncomfortably. Vapour was coming out of her breath. There was an unfinished glass of chocolate mousse standing on the table. He remembered he liked the orange mousses once.-Why doesn't she hear me? I can't make her wake up!...Familiar sounds came from the TV set, she was watching their wedding video and... Finally he started to understand and remember the fatal car crash he had.- Good night my love. Sleep tight. You were my ying, now find your yang. You can't imagine how much love I take with me.
Dear Evan,
... so, "it's just me"!? Lol... C'mon! Don't be so modest :D You're the host of the challenge and my 'superwitty' friend here :)
As for your comment, well I guess sometimes we need a little boost to start doing something but as I said before, I'm not fond of writing although I know it's a good way to improve my English too. Anyway I'm busier these days and I guess it won't be easy for me so, please forgive me, but I'll bear in mind :)
Nimzaf,
thank you so much. I think you enjoyed twice as others because of your replies :D
Saba,
I don't exactly know how long it took me to write it, maybe one hour, surely less than thinking what to write and how to add some words Evangelina asked us to allocate haha...
Onee,
Thank you for your concern my teacher :D I see I've had many silly mistakes I'll bear them in mind.
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Hello Estanis,
Great job,
Your imagination is creative!
Thank you for the compliment, you all will get me to believe it haha...
Take care my friend, it's always nice seeing you around :)
... so, "it's just me"!? Lol... C'mon! Don't be so modest :D You're the host of the challenge and my 'superwitty' friend here :)
As for your comment, well I guess sometimes we need a little boost to start doing something but as I said before, I'm not fond of writing although I know it's a good way to improve my English too. Anyway I'm busier these days and I guess it won't be easy for me so, please forgive me, but I'll bear in mind :)
thank you so much. I think you enjoyed twice as others because of your replies :D
Saba,
I don't exactly know how long it took me to write it, maybe one hour, surely less than thinking what to write and how to add some words Evangelina asked us to allocate haha...
Onee,
Thank you for your concern my teacher :D I see I've had many silly mistakes I'll bear them in mind.
Estanis,
Finally you wrote something again here..:)) So touchy story and you made each scene very well. At the end....so sweeeet....! :D
Btw, could you consider this correction...
Out of nowhere ....... Why does she not hear me?
Hello Estanis,
Excellent!
Your writing skill surprised me!
You are a busy person, I like to know how long it took you to write this blog?
Glad to see such a comment coming from you.
thanks a lot for your correction, I have re edited as you suggested :)
I'll consider your wish.
Mesmerizing! it seems an extract from a novel.
Keep up with this mood Estanis!
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