once upon a time ,there was a girl who lives with her family in egypt which is located in north africa , she was very poor.She didn't like the way her family treat her so she decided to move on her decision was very hard for her because she will be obliged to lose touch with her litle brother who 's 2 years old. But the situation was more painful so she left the house without even contemplating about her brother . that day finally come, she woke up early in the morning to avoid her little brother, she didn't want to see him crying when leaving. before the sun rise , she took her bag which was full of rags and their was in her bag a picture of her brother , she opened the door and start looking every where in the house before leaving and she had a hope that one day she will return with better condition. With undressed feet and teary eyes she walked out of her house looking for a brighter day , She kept walking for miles and all what she had been watching is her brother's face smiling and saying ; Why did you leave me alone ?
her brother looked so pathetic and sad, the girl felt that she was going to die, that was very hard to hundle for a young girl, so she just did I if she doesn't care and walked away.... she closed her eyes and started thinking abt the decison that she must take at that moment , finally her decision was To Leave , she start runing , and unforuantly there was a car of a farmer when she was croosing the road. The guy was blasting music and having a nice time , He couldn't realize that there was someone who's crossing the road , Accidentally she screamed hard , She couldn't move. as you all imagined guys, the girl was hit by the car .....she had a terrible accident, she was bleeding and bleeding, she was left alone on the road unfortunatly no one was passing by......... the farmer far away , and thanks to god there was a very smart boy who witnessed the accident , when he saw here bleeding he called the emergency and he passed all the night with here . Once she woke up , She didn't know where is she , Or who is the guy who was standing beside her , She started to call him (Jack) that was her brother's name. hearing her calling that name, the guy tried to get close to her to comfort her, so he held her hand and asked her to calm down and told her that he is here with her whenever she needs help
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Welcome to you in blog dept / section. In very first blog you tried to prove your writing abilities. Very well done. I hope so, you'll keep continue to prove yourself in English club. English club have many good members who want to help others for improving English writing skills, so stay there and enjoy learning. see ya!
It's awesome to hear that you are writing stories in the chatroom and sharing them on your blog. Great idea!
I recommend that you fix the formatting, though. This story is a bit tough on the eyes. Be sure to check your punctuation and capitalization. You could add a few paragraph breaks, too. I look forward to reading it again.
Cheers, Tara
i'm waiting for the next part ........ interesting story :)
So is this a part of a series? Nice story, by the way. Just an observation 'with undressed feet', you may use 'barefoot'.
fatma, try to choose a short title for your blog the next time.
Fatma.....you published our story ??!! o.O I didn't expect that to be honest with you !!!! well, thank you anyway :)