In the beginning, there was emptiness and void. Then a mysterious thing happened. God said that the four-dimensional divergence of an antisymmetric second rank tensor equals zero and there was light. A second after this mysterious bang I was born. It was an ineffable event and I seriously can’t recall what precisely happened. There were others like photons and different elementary particles but for them surrounding was opaque for quite sometimes. For me, I could see and walk around from the moment I emerged into existence.
I was quite different from others around me. I have no charge and less mass in contrast to others. I had been bullied and called names like half spin because I couldn’t spin a full 360 degrees. I had been practising spinning since when I was bullied for the first time but still I can’t spin a whole 360 degrees. It is not my fault this is who I am and I had accepted this truth a long ago but I don’t know why I’m still trying. I think this is because of the childhood subjugation.
Due to my divergent being. I had and still have advantages over others. I’m fast and I can’t be slowed or hindered by forces like Electromagnetic and gravitational force and I can pass through any matter in whole cosmos.
My life journey has been an amazing adventure. I have seen everything from the beginning. Would you believe, I had even seen the birth of first stars and formation of first galaxies. Those were extraordinary occurrences. I had seen how your solar system formed and your blue dot (earth). I had witnessed the whole evolution of the life on the earth and I know how you came to be here.
My name is the neutrino.
Note: In the beginning, God said that the four-dimensional divergence of an antisymmetric second rank tensor equals zero and there was light. Michio Kaku
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Thank you, Rahul ;)
Thank you for your appreciation Mr. Danny. I tried to add participles but couldn't managed to do it. That is why i had to conclude my story suddenly. I guess, i need to work on participles.
And a lots of thanks for the correction of my story. I'll read the link you mentioned. Thanks again.
Well, here are my corrections. You can ask me any questions about them.
In the beginning, there was emptiness and void. Then a mysterious thing happened. God said that the four-dimensional divergence of an antisymmetric second rank tensor equals zero and there was light. A second after that mysterious bang I was born. It was an ineffable event and I can hardly recall what precisely happened. There were others like photons and different elementary particles but surrounding was sometimes opaque for them __. As to me, I could see and walk around since the moment I emerged into existence.
I was quite different from others around me. Contrary to others, I have no charge and less mass. I was bullied (do you really mean a neutrino was threatened? I think, it was teased) and called the names like a half spin because I couldn’t spin around. I had been practicing spinning since __ I was bullied for the first time but __I can’t spin around, yet. It is not my fault this is what I am and I accepted this truth __ long ago. But I don’t know why I’m still trying. I think it is because of the childish obedience.
Due to my divergent being, I had and still have advantages over others. I’m fast and I can’t be slowed or hindered by such forces like Electromagnetic and gravitational__ and I can pass through any matter in the whole cosmos.
My life journey has been an amazing adventure. I have seen everything from the beginning. Can you believe, I even saw the birth of the first stars and formation of the first galaxies. Those were extraordinary occurrences. I saw how your solar system formed and your blue dot (the earth). I witnessed the whole evolution of __ life on the earth and I know how come you are here.
My name is a neutrino.
Dear Qulli! You have written a very interesting story! As a scholar, I am just delighted! However, I have read your story twice and haven't noticed ANY participle. On the other hand, I have noticed some incorrect tenses. Well, I will surely correct your great story very soon.
You can read about the past tenses here:
http://www.myenglishclub.com/group/improving-grammar-with-tanya-and...
My wife is an English teacher and is very good at explaining things. If you still have any questions after readin her explanations, I will try to make them clear.
In the beginning, God said that the four-dimensional divergence of an antisymmetric second rank tensor equals zero and there was light. Michio Kaku
I've used this quotation in the second line of my story.